Temple

Ekka winds burn
my joss sticks swiftly; still I know
my prayers are heard.

Once again I resented fact that published poets were (are!) allowed to be completely flexy with the structure yet we were told strictly to write in the here-and-now with reference to nature and try to combine two images together, blah, blah, blah, bitch, bitch, bitch. Anyway I had many haiku that I liked, which I may post later, but here is stanza one of what I submitted. I had a second stanza but the more I read it, the less I like it.

I tend to use a lot of unnecessary words (I'm told). I'm mostly guilty of using too many conjunctions. I think I need them. Perhaps this is a sign I am not using the English language as well as I should be.

Note: I am not expecting a 7. Though I'd love one.